Don't want to discourage you in your writing, but you couldn't hold my interest. For one thing, as a college student or graduate, Andrew's attitude would likely not be one of thinking that America is the greatest country in the world; colleges teach the opposite. If he were smart enough to not absorb the anti-American prejudice in college, he would likely be informed enough to not have the anti-gun prejudice he evidently displays. Fair writing otherwise, but in my experience, a person scoffs, he does not get involved in "scoffing" (I know that's being really picky, but it affects the way the sentence reads to me and makes it less believable).
Thanks for having the courage to share your writing with us.
Thanks for having the courage to share your writing with us.
